Your opening is good at setting up the scene and ideas of the film, and leaves the audience asking lots of questions about what is happening, which is good. The film would appeal to teenagers. The use of music at the beginning is effective and builds tension, but more diegetic sound could be used to build the tension even more, for example the sound of footsteps on the stair could be emphasized more to create atmosphere. Also I'm not sure if the shooting sound effect works. The shooting sound does but the screaming doesn't really work as it sounds likes a computer generated sound clip, and doesn't really sound realistic.
The variety of shots is really good and so is the continuity. The shot where the two girls look up and see the boys is especially good. Overall a good opening, which is intriguing and sets up the story very clearly, without giving too much away. stella.
I enjoyed the opening and was intreseted in what would happen next; I thiought that it could easily develop into a deeper story from what we were shown and fitted well as an opening. The framing looked tight and in most places the main subject was clear in the shot. The costume fitted well with the school setting, however the Converse of the shooters seemed a bit out of place. The transitions were smooth (Match-on-action etc.) and it made sense as a sequence in itself. The sound fitted well and was synced in-time if many foleys were added. The music at the start built suspense but felt a bit more Horror than Thriller; however, given the event of the shooting it could be approraite.
I found your thriller rather interesting, the mystery effect is there and that is what makes clear that it is a thriller, good POV shots, 2 shots and panning worked very well with this, the posh school type also added good effect.Nice fading mixed with creepy music added a mysterious feel and the titling was a good titling form - Dan Johnstone
Your opening is good at setting up the scene and ideas of the film, and leaves the audience asking lots of questions about what is happening, which is good. The film would appeal to teenagers.
ReplyDeleteThe use of music at the beginning is effective and builds tension, but more diegetic sound could be used to build the tension even more, for example the sound of footsteps on the stair could be emphasized more to create atmosphere. Also I'm not sure if the shooting sound effect works. The shooting sound does but the screaming doesn't really work as it sounds likes a computer generated sound clip, and doesn't really sound realistic.
The variety of shots is really good and so is the continuity. The shot where the two girls look up and see the boys is especially good. Overall a good opening, which is intriguing and sets up the story very clearly, without giving too much away.
stella.
I enjoyed the opening and was intreseted in what would happen next; I thiought that it could easily develop into a deeper story from what we were shown and fitted well as an opening.
ReplyDeleteThe framing looked tight and in most places the main subject was clear in the shot.
The costume fitted well with the school setting, however the Converse of the shooters seemed a bit out of place.
The transitions were smooth (Match-on-action etc.) and it made sense as a sequence in itself.
The sound fitted well and was synced in-time if many foleys were added. The music at the start built suspense but felt a bit more Horror than Thriller; however, given the event of the shooting it could be approraite.
Scott- TeamGimli
I found your thriller rather interesting, the mystery effect is there and that is what makes clear that it is a thriller, good POV shots, 2 shots and panning worked very well with this, the posh school type also added good effect.Nice fading mixed with creepy music added a mysterious feel and the titling was a good titling form - Dan Johnstone
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